Wednesday, May 13, 2015

the fishing trip

dad and tom were hiking to dads favorite fishing hole. ( actually it was a lake ) they  stopped and rested by a river that lead to the lake. "dad," said tom " why don't we try fishing in the river I see a few fish in it". "sure" said dad "lets try it". they got out there fishing poles and cast out there rods buzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz "run were all the bees come from"yelled tom. "one of are must of hit there nest "yelled dad. SPLASH!! they jumped into the river the buzzing eventually  died down  and they climbed onto the bank. after drying off they set off down the trail. the got to the lake and cast there lines into the water. "wow! I got a whopper " yelled dad. reeling it in. "yeah a mattress "laughed  tom. they caght a few small ones but not enough for dinner "will half to get some at the store dad said gloomily. " HHHHHEEEEEEELLLLLLPPPPPPPPPPP" yelled dad. SPLASH!! " tom help me its as big as a shark" dad yelled." that's enough  for two dinners" said tom.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      THE END                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        

3 comments:

  1. Wow, great story! Good dialogue!

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  2. Good job, Andrew! Why don't you go back and see if you can capitalize some sentences? And can you find the spelling error in the 2nd line?

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